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Revised Logline Critique Round - #14
Kitty
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TITLE: Unitus
GENRE: YA

LOGLINE: Teenage girl seeks to escape her dystopian society through alien abduction, but the alien she summons turn out to be a fierce warrior who wants to kill her.

Read the original logline on MSFV.

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I agree that it's a little bare, but even so, I found it to be interesting. The last sentence left me asking, so what does she do? If you could answer that & maybe give us her name to connect with her better, I think this would be really good.

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