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Revised Logline Critique Round - #19 (Lost Email)
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A last minute entry from a lost email sent within the timeframe... the Internet must have eaten it. Bad, hungry Internet.

Title: Swimming With Tchaikovsky
Genre: YA Suspense/Magical Realism

In St. Petersburg for a cello competition, Sally watches her host father get kidnapped and starts seeing visions with clues when she plays Russian music. As she tracks the clues to the upper echelons of the police department, various thugs-for-hire appear on her tail, but her host family has given her more hugs than she ever got at home, and there’s no way she’ll let them find their father in a dumpster.

Read the original logline on MSFV.

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This sounds like a really interesting story. The opening clause is awkward; what about "While __-year-old cellist Sally is in St. Petersburg for a competition..."?

The first two clauses of the second sentence feel like they could be condensed, but I love the ending, and I definitely like the premise of the story!

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