justjess

I like this revision. Is Jack a drug dealer? That's one unclear detail that seems to get readers a little stuck. This is more copyediting than content, but I'd rewrite the last sentence as:
"Jack always seems to be one step behind the dirty agent who burned him, and they'll have to dodge bullets, avalanches and bombs as they fall in love - if Seely's [descriptor? I'd like a clue as to what's up with her past] past doesn't cripple their future together."

Getting there! I love the premise, and I'd read this book.