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Revised Logline Critique Round - #14
TITLE: Unitus

LOGLINE: Teenage girl seeks to escape her dystopian society through alien abduction, but the alien she summons turn out to be a fierce warrior who wants to kill her.

Read the original logline on MSFV.

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Just a little more here. I'd like the mc's name.

"dystopian society" is generic. Can you describe it in two or three words?

A point of clarity - is the mc kidnapping aliens or allowing herself to be kidnapped?

I wouldn't mind a hint of why the alien wants to kill her.

You have some elbow room to work with - it shouldn't take many words.

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